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Margaret Louise

  • Lyric Poetry Re: a little dream in abstract

    I really enjoyed this. It may not be perfect but I feel like that was kind of the point you were trying to make. It's dreams, and dreams don't make ...

    Dec 30, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: last words

    This is a short short story, and it's dream-like, not at all real. Please tell me what you think! Green grass and blue sky mocked them. She raised her hand ...

    Dec 30, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Will you be blonde today?

    Thanks for the feedback, guys. It means a ton. Anyway, there is sort of a story behind this poem. I wrote it for a friend of mine, and it's in ...

    Nov 28, 2008
  • Narrative Poetry Re: In your eyes

    I liked this a lot. It really got into the head of a frightened and worried parent and also manages to strike fear into the heart of the reader, for ...

    Nov 28, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Fall Of Man

    Hmm. Great imagery. But I didn't know what you were getting at here. I didn't know what you wanted to say. A zombie massacre? It's unclear. But one thing is ...

    Nov 28, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Re-Imagining Your Image

    I LOVED this. It was so dramatic, so powerful and poignant. I like the imagery and the symbolism and the fact that it was a bit arcane--it made it more ...

    Nov 28, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Will you be blonde today?

    She waltzed with pointed toes and pirouettes, Standing so short and with those eyes so bright. Better at once than just blonds or brunettes, I should have known--she claims both ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Dads

    Aw this reminded me of my own father! He's awesome, but not that great with the big stuff. Luckily I'm old enough that I can pretty much do stuff on ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: on my bicycle

    I loved this poem. I loved the symbolism (if indeed that is what you were going for) of the bicyclist not fitting into any clear-cut category. I also like how ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: I Dabble

    I Dabble. I dabble in poetry. When the sun rises, I think it's night. The stars are shiny pearls in my jewelry box. Moonlight hurts my eyes, and fire burns ...

    Nov 27, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: origin of symmetry

    Thank you so much! And yes, I am a devoted and slightly obsessed Muse fan. I'm glad to meet another one :)

    Nov 25, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: origin of symmetry

    This poem is supposed to be a diamond, if set in the middle of a page of text. It's difficult to see here, but that's how it is :D ORIGIN ...

    Nov 25, 2008


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